"Informing outsiders of a certain culture is necessary in preserving that culture's beliefs. Iranian culture is so dynamic and rich that it provides a most opportune topic for authors to write about. Unfortunately, as mentioned through The Bookseller of Kabul, the author mentions how precious books and artifacts were destroyed containing valuable information about Iran's culture and history. 'They [the foot soldiers] hacked at the sculptures till only the plinth remained' (Seierstad 20). The author';s goal throughout the passage is to ensure his precious books remain intact. While describing his journey, the author provides valuable information about Iranian culture and the Taliban as they were very involved in his mission to save other books of history. In Arabian Nights as well as Censoring an Iranian Love Story, both provide information into Iranian culture. The intimate details about the author or main character's lives all relate to practices and beliefs of Iran and therefore, those passages help to educate the reader better about Iranian principles."
I agree with many of Kyle's points here. I believe his paragraph topic sentence was relevant and broad, and he moved from the general to the specific well. I do not believe Kyle lead into his quote particularly well, and he could have chose a different quote which could have been more effective. Nonetheless, this is a very strong argument.
ReplyDeleteThere are not any major errors that i can see and Kyle did exceptionally well on this early essay. He includes a strong quote that provides back up to his purpose. There arent any grammatical errors that are obvious to me and i applaud him on this fantastic essay.
ReplyDeleteThe entire passage is written thoroughly. His quote is relevant to his purpose. And i think his strongest point was his conclusion. he wrapped up the entire passage effectively. He articulated how the details of the passage are useful in assisting the audience. I think he captured the authors motive with this perfectly. However, i didnt like the opening. it was a little too vague.
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