Here is an excerpt from KR's paper. What are its strengths? How could he empower it?
"Global outlook is simply a broader sense of perspective as it relates to politics. All individuals have some sort of global outlook, especially in the modern day. Hedges, in his piece, emphasizes the idea that 'all groups looked at themselves as victims ... ignoring the excesses of their own and highlighting the excesses of [some other group]' (Hedges 923). The only way that such ideas could be brought about, as not everyone is a victim, is through government distortion on a mass scale. Propaganda of one's own people and even others causes a 'trance' from which it is difficult to leave and that causes a person to have a different view on his own and other governments than he would without this propaganda caused change in perspective: 'The effectiveness of the myths peddled in war is powerful. We often come to doubt our own perceptions. We hide these doubts, like troubled believers, sure that no one else feels like them. We feel guilty. The myths have determined not only how we should speak but how we should think' (Hedges 924)."
Kyle makes some awesome points. I agree with him that everyone has some sort of global outlook, it comes with the world being so much more connected than it ever was in history.
ReplyDeleteThat quote is a fantastic way to open up the paragraph and the connection throughout the whole thing of global to regional is simply amazing and leads for a really good essay.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the flow of this. I liked how the topic sentence flowed into the quote. It was smooth and capturing. The second quote, however, slightly has too much "we" and it throws off the rhythm of the poem.
ReplyDeleteI like this passage a lot. Kyle's movement after his quote is very strong and he connects ideas very well. I don't know who Hedges is and he could have established context, but Kyle probably did that before this excerpt.
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