"Another way ancient history is vital to African studies is through sayings and proverbs. Flags have always been important in Ghanian society, mostly in military campaigns. However, the vivid symbolism in the depiction of the Asafo flags makes these flags special. Each flag is connected to a certain Ghanian proverb, sending a message directed to a specific group pf [people. One example of this is a flag that says 'When an elephant steps on a trap, no more trap' (Dueling Flags). The proverb is a warning to everyone who may want to dethrone the chief or the one in control. In every proverb displayed on the flags, we can learn new things about the philosophy of the people who made the proverbs. Things that they find admirable, their way of being of themselves, and tradition dating back to the ancient times is all would up into one proverb, and indirectly a flag. All of this ancient history formed into something tangible is similar to other things around Africa, using the ancient history and creating it into something meaningful, such as the proverbs."
This is a very strong argument content wise. It could be stepped up to the next level grammatically though. The use of the word flag should not be used as much as it is, especially multiple times in the same sentence. I would also avoid the use of "we" and the word this as it does not specify what it is referring to. Aside from these aspects that would make make stronger sentences, the content itself is very strong.
ReplyDeleteThe lesser Will makes a solid argument here. I liked his relating the flags to African studies and culture in the broad sense of the concept. He writes extensively about this topic without becoming too stale. However, I believe Will should have focused on his example of the elephant flag further. He explains it very briefly and may have left an objective reader confused.
ReplyDeleteThe insight Will provides is very vivid and creates a great picture of what is happening and how it creates to the purpose, the couple of errors that there is is made up of grammatical errors, use of unnecessary words and repetition of unfavorable writing tendencies.
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