"Assia Djebar, author of Growing Up in Algeria, was not involved in any bloody conflict between France and Algeria, but she was involved in a crisi of soul. Assia was one of very few who met a favorable opportunity for education in Africa. She attended both a French school and an Arab school in her youth, and was trying to explore differences between traditional Arab schooling methods (she was 'linked to it' from birth) and innovative, interesting French methods. She writes, 'As a young teenager I enjoy the exhilarating hours spent every Thursday in training one the sports field (at the French school) ... Bit how can I tell my father that it's compulsory for me to wear shorts, in other words, I have to show my legs?' The first problem of acculturation is that it may break inhabitants of Africa away from their respective tribal customs (like Assia) in a continent in which culture is based heavily on tradition."
I think that one problem with this paragraph is that it starts out too specific. The points made are great and very useful in the argument while there could have been a more general analyzation of acculturation in the beginning. Besides that though, the content itself is very good. Also, I like the technique of using parentheses within and outside of quotes. It helps to make a strong but not confusing argument and also better explains the quotation used. Overall, it is a great and convincing piece.
ReplyDeleteYou make a good point kyle. Ws does not open the topic up in a broader spectrum. that limits his argument to only those stories. and defeats the reference to other sources. other than that, will very effectively supports his quotes with definitive examples
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