Here is an excerpt from KR's paper. What are its strengths? How could he empower it?
"Repetition is a recurring technique in such animalistic stories and goes further in revealing primitive island culture. Each of the three stories has some aspect of repeating structure, dialogue, or ideas that contribute to an overall theme. In Anansi Returns, the actions of the spider are very similar and contribute to the story as a whole and make each theme and aspect of the story clearer. God and the Pintards may very well be the epitome of such repetition and God sends multiple angels to complete the same task, telling each the same thing as the pintards respond in the same way each time as well. The repetition demonstrates the power behind the pintards' simplistic - possibly because they are animals - spirits. Each angel is 'compelled' only to become 'ashamed' although even God is ultimately compelled. This cyclical pattern evolves in a way that provides evidence for island culture. It is undeniable that the basicness of repetition is not only primal but also very informative."
I enjoyed this passage, i feel like it took time to talk about each example/story and break it down to why it helps explain his purpose. This way of writing makes it very easy for me the reader to take a solid stand on what Kyle is saying and either fully agree with it or disagree. I also like his first sentence because it really made me want to read because it starts with repetition which is a rhetorical strategy that we talk a lot about in class.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Kyle's paragraph topic sentence and I liked how he connected that to the stories, especially God and the Pintards. I had trouble seeing how Kyle was trying to connect repetition to an islander lifestyle towards the end there but otherwise this passage was very strong.
ReplyDeleteSpectacular passage Kyle, great work. No really, spectacular.
ReplyDeleteKyle conneceted everything together very well. This passage flowed. The topic sentence led to the quotes and analysis perfectly. The only problem i have is that it is repetition. That is a very basic and bland device and i personally would chose a stronger main point. Nonetheless, Kyle did a great job with what he presented.
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