Here is an excerpt from KR's paper. What are its strengths? How can he empower it?
"Comparisons are imperative in explaining the advantages of one thing over another. In One of these Days, the reader can recognize a stark contrast between the dentist and the mayor. The mayor is symbolic of all that is wrong with the town, as further symbolized by his aching tooth. The seemingly lazy dentist is in fact a sort of rebel with a patriotic and revolutionary vibe which reflects the attitudes of the masses in Latin America. The Good Neighbor employs a similar comparison technique though with pictures. The variety of angles from which a picture is taken and its subsequent interpretation can vary greatly. This, multiple perspectives and backgrounds of a particular photo must be compared and analyzed in order to evoke a better understanding of the situation being photographed. The analogies created by the author question what a picture truly represents such as 'free food or ration line?' (146) and 'Moscow or Masaya' (146). These discrepancies between location and the welfare of an area can have a great impact on an understanding of a situation and therefore both a fictional and nonfictional account employed comparisons to make their argument."
Per usual, Kyle is on point here. His argument makes a lot of sense and his understanding of the individual pieces he writes about is deep. However, he does not elaborate on the connection between the two passages more than, "similar comparison techniques," and I think he needs to do that.
ReplyDeleteKyle really saw the deeper connotations of the article and explored them in this passage, the thinking could have had more depth but it was much better than i did with a lot of clarity and a lot of comparisons back to his thesis and purpose.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how he tied his two main points together. I thought that was effective. I also thought he nailed the explanation for the dentist perfectly. The quote was spot on, the explanation perfect, and the transition smooth. However, i was not a fan of the closing. I thought it was rough and forced. It could have been split into two sentences.
ReplyDeleteKyle's analogy to a poem is something that is really interesting and something that I could have never have thought of when I read through the article and made my points. He nails his main points and does a very good job of enforcing his viewpoints.
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